Comments on: Making Muncie http://www.thebradking.com/2009/07/17/making-muncie/?utm_source=rss&utm_medium=rss&utm_campaign=making-muncie Tue, 07 Sep 2010 01:31:00 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.0.1 By: Pablo http://www.thebradking.com/2009/07/17/making-muncie/#comment-150 Pablo Sun, 19 Jul 2009 14:17:14 +0000 http://www.thebradking.com/2009/07/17/making-muncie/#comment-150 Right on. Thank you, sir. I've certainly done the research. Now, I pitch a the heavy story. Cheers again! Right on. Thank you, sir. I've certainly done the research. Now, I pitch a the heavy story. Cheers again!

]]> By: Pablo http://www.thebradking.com/2009/07/17/making-muncie/#comment-73 Pablo Sun, 19 Jul 2009 07:17:14 +0000 http://www.thebradking.com/2009/07/17/making-muncie/#comment-73 Right on. Thank you, sir. I've certainly done the research. Now, I pitch a the heavy story. Cheers again! Right on. Thank you, sir. I've certainly done the research. Now, I pitch a the heavy story. Cheers again!

]]> By: Brad_King http://www.thebradking.com/2009/07/17/making-muncie/#comment-72 Brad_King Sat, 18 Jul 2009 18:28:13 +0000 http://www.thebradking.com/2009/07/17/making-muncie/#comment-72 I would suggest that you define "fine American storytelling" means. I don't really know what the specific thesis is - IOW, what is it about YOU that offers a template for the greater story (which you just suggest). You haven't given anything here that suggests you've done the research which will allow you to say: this is the path that many others have experienced (e.g. numbers or qualitative research).<br><br>That's what I would do to fix it up. Add some concrete details to the pitch graf that allow you to make the broader argument (which is the last sentence in that pitch) I would suggest that you define “fine American storytelling” means. I don't really know what the specific thesis is – IOW, what is it about YOU that offers a template for the greater story (which you just suggest). You haven't given anything here that suggests you've done the research which will allow you to say: this is the path that many others have experienced (e.g. numbers or qualitative research).

That's what I would do to fix it up. Add some concrete details to the pitch graf that allow you to make the broader argument (which is the last sentence in that pitch)

]]> By: Pablo http://www.thebradking.com/2009/07/17/making-muncie/#comment-71 Pablo Sat, 18 Jul 2009 18:21:46 +0000 http://www.thebradking.com/2009/07/17/making-muncie/#comment-71 True. True. So would this be a decent pitch?--<br><br>Sentence: The fiscal collapses in the American news industry can be reduced to the worship of news-making over the financial incentives of fine American storytelling.<br><br>Pitch: This story begins in the Washington D.C. Scripps-Howard newsroom during Barack Obama's inauguration and proceeds through my hiring and firing at the St. Louis Beacon; exodus in the blogosphere; and arrival in the Google News search via The Huffington Post. It will be written in the tradition of fine American storytelling, offering historical & procedural analyses of news-making & storytelling en route to the conclusion that great storytellers create followings that in 2009 have and can finance news-making.<br><br><br>? True. True. So would this be a decent pitch?–

Sentence: The fiscal collapses in the American news industry can be reduced to the worship of news-making over the financial incentives of fine American storytelling.

Pitch: This story begins in the Washington D.C. Scripps-Howard newsroom during Barack Obama's inauguration and proceeds through my hiring and firing at the St. Louis Beacon; exodus in the blogosphere; and arrival in the Google News search via The Huffington Post. It will be written in the tradition of fine American storytelling, offering historical & procedural analyses of news-making & storytelling en route to the conclusion that great storytellers create followings that in 2009 have and can finance news-making.

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]]> By: Brad_King http://www.thebradking.com/2009/07/17/making-muncie/#comment-70 Brad_King Sat, 18 Jul 2009 15:41:49 +0000 http://www.thebradking.com/2009/07/17/making-muncie/#comment-70 The JK stuff was REALLY glitchy with my comments so I changed back. Now Disqus won't import that comments from the other system. **Sigh** <br><br>Essentially I said this: there is no "template" for writing pitches. As an editor, though, I would never hire someone who couldn't boil their story into one sentence with a paragraph, maybe two. There's not really an excuse for a writer to *not* do that as it is our craft :) The JK stuff was REALLY glitchy with my comments so I changed back. Now Disqus won't import that comments from the other system. **Sigh**

Essentially I said this: there is no “template” for writing pitches. As an editor, though, I would never hire someone who couldn't boil their story into one sentence with a paragraph, maybe two. There's not really an excuse for a writer to *not* do that as it is our craft :)

]]> By: Pablo http://www.thebradking.com/2009/07/17/making-muncie/#comment-69 Pablo Sat, 18 Jul 2009 07:12:56 +0000 http://www.thebradking.com/2009/07/17/making-muncie/#comment-69 my comment disappeared! zut! my comment disappeared! zut!

]]> By: Brad_King http://www.thebradking.com/2009/07/17/making-muncie/#comment-68 Brad_King Sat, 18 Jul 2009 02:56:09 +0000 http://www.thebradking.com/2009/07/17/making-muncie/#comment-68 test test

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